Suicidal dream world, so demanding, youre commanding
The colour scheme to match your despondency and blood,
It doesnt have to be this way. Hangers dont bleed anyway.
Overheads lie, dont be blinded by false claims.
Utterly corrupted by promises of beautiful despair
The stunning imagery capturing one last breath.
The light swears you should be thankful that its here
How dare you race to escape my enchanting glare?
Cut yourself free and hit the ground running.
(I hope you throw away the rope and dont look back)
Not your day to die.
No heads or tails with reality.
When the game is truth dont push for a dare.
You cant retake this moment.
No do over.
Dont make it end
This way.
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I apologize for the darkness of this piece. It was emotional to write but the Sunshine always offered me hope. I know suicide is a touchy issue and its something many people deal with, its played on my mind from time to time, this piece is not encouraging suicide and if youre feeling that bad please ask for help from someone you trust. However I wanted this to be a sort of warning for people how final the end is and that there are other ways out of their depression other then self harm. Too often I see suicide and self hate glamorized on deviant art and called beautiful. In my own little way I hope this helps.
Who do you (and I) have to thank for this piece?
Firstly many thanks to the artist chosen for the =VisualLit competition, the original can be found at this [link] . He has a wonderful gallery I hope you give him a glance.
Secondly to the group on d.a. and there Challenge de la Four More information can be found at this [link]
Thirdly the musical artist Tim Foley, and his song Nobodys Listening helped me pull this together and his song Out of His Misery helped me brain storm and get started. You can find both songs and more at the Podsafe Music Network ([link] ) Thank you x
I love the photo and everything. It was a bit confusing trying to read off the words in the 'right' order on the picture though. They still made sence which is great... *applauds* was it meant to work that way?
I think it works in almost anyway you read it, that's why I called it fragmented, it's supposed to be part of the dream affect. The photo, is wonderful please pop by the artist and let him know that
Thank you for the feed back, It means a lot I'm still not sure how I feel about this.
Ha ! you tought i wasn't coming sometime ... I'm here now ... do not have all the time to read all your poetry and look at your mysterious avatar...
I like the visual concept of this text ... Should do that kind more often ... As you know, i do not always understand all your texts ... Most of the time i feel them as black and romantic ... sometime ironic and funny Anayway how could i communicate crealy with you with my messy english ... Mister French ...
I think we'll have to agree to disagree about that. I also enjoy using structure, and spend a lot of time using it in some of my other works ...
But thank you for making it clear, I wasn't sure if this style would work for you. I'm glad to hear I'm still in the contest, and I can't wait to read what other people did.
I also just wanted to point out I didn't just take the photo and past text onto it. I thought alot about how to structure the words into the piece and how I wanted to show the piece. Making it both my own, but also I hope showing off the artist skills
Devious Comments
(I hope you throw away the rope and dont look back)
Not your day to die.
No heads or tails with reality.
When the game is truth dont push for a dare. "
i love these lines and i love the way you give it to us with those construction pictures
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Please?
Thank you.
You're welcome.
Wow... those aren't hard to type at all!
Thank you for the feed back, It means a lot I'm still not sure how I feel about this.
I like the visual concept of this text ... Should do that kind more often ... As you know, i do not always understand all your texts ... Most of the time i feel them as black and romantic ... sometime ironic and funny Anayway how could i communicate crealy with you with my messy english ... Mister French ...
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I truly do.
But don't worry, you're not disqualified from the contest I just wanted to make that clear. (:
But thank you for making it clear, I wasn't sure if this style would work for you. I'm glad to hear I'm still in the contest, and I can't wait to read what other people did.
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